Why should we take care of parents? Only because parents take care of us. Parents take care of us only because we are their children. Most of parents love their children more than love themselves. Nobody knows if children will love their parents just like parents love their children. In all, taking care of parents is not only good for our family but also good for our society.
Hi, big boy! Your introduction is very intresting. You have a good hook, but it seems that your statement is not relate to your topic.
ReplyDeleteAlthough I like your approach starting with question, the general statement appears too short. It lacks structure and have some pronouns issues. I found your thesis statement interesting because you opinion on role reversal has a positive effects.
ReplyDeletethe fist answer is unconvincible. you have a good thesis statement. the introduction is kind fo short ..
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